Bridal thoughts gently touched...
Conversing in silence began…
Hero’s thoughts flushed
It made her blush
Then came the lush…
Palanquin&palatial plushy
Quiver tinged her….
Windows,walls&litter
Saw her flutter&glitter
Strolled with a constant feeling..
of tenderness….
Began feeling him..
In her breath& dreams…
She longed and waited..
Was that a crush
Or love
Will he come to take her?
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Ofcourse he could come. But she definitely have to wait! He tried a bus and the drivers called for a strike. He tried a train and the rails got de-railed. He wanted to fly but the charges seemed too high to reach! he tried a rickshaw but the meters refused to stop! he couldnt use a horse cos priyanka gandhi would lock him up for animal abuse! now all he could do is walk! her hero walks his life for her. she would get him.. she just have to wait! :-)
haa.. i wish someone somewhere has similar thought for me! :-)
nice words scrawler!
Great sounds in here! well done!
:( scrawler, u twisted it in the end..
hopes are shattered ...
was with her in moment of her feels..
magic!!!
@sawan : :D (..."meters refused to stop"...)
@ sawan...Thanks! but...don't leave ur heroine like this ;)In which world are you living?Bus,Auto....you gotta fly Hero!
@ karmanna...whose 'hopes' are u talking about?Yours?ya...definitely..ur hopes are going to shatter when you reach home :D
Linda...Thanks for stopping by..
@ sawan you are yet to answer to the question crush or love? i know you are the only one who can answer!
@S1..my heroines hopes ...;)
will hero respond...?? sawan phir kya huaa??!!
mmm... a nice one from the three unsimilar words..! this time the theme was entirely different...! but unlike karmanna said.. u didnt twist...! i could sense this ending.. almost similar to something else that u wrote...! makes me remember the madhu muttom kavitha..!!!
@Shaan..why are u obsessed with Madhu muttom kavitha?the themes are entirely different!The ending is left to the imagination of readers!
@ scrawler...good one...loved the play of words...though the heroine seems doomed, likely candidate to join Scattered thoughts "FOSLA"- Frustrated One Sided Lovers Association :)),
@ sawan...if you walk it ... you will reach in time for her first borns naming ceremony... lifting this idea shamelessly from a story about a snail...The snail began the journey to a friends wedding and reached on time for the friends' first borns' naming ceremony :))
@senorita....sawan is a permanent member of FOSLA!
Shall we send the heroine in the poem to FOSLA?
awww.. Bridal thoughts touched without even hero's proposing (or am I missing it?) FOSLA for sure!!
nice effort young poetess and really didn’t intend to criticize, but as blog maniacs.. Satanic powers take over some times ;)
and BTW, don’t you think this happens in poems only, at least for the gals. Usually guys are dreaming like it with every single gal they are eyeing on.
Sawan – Menka Gandhi dude… but yeah I can imagine.. it happens when you walk this long and the princess is waiting on the other side of world ;) can’t think straight..
Sen – keep it up raconteur.. ;)
@sen: lol, first born? naming ceremony? ;-) what a pathetic end to the wait and the crush!
@karmana: the hero ought to respond, thats why he is the hero :-)
heyy, i cant see your blog. it gives me "Profile Not Available" :-(
@scattered thoughts: yeah right.. but priyanka is sure beautiiful enuf compared to menaka.. ab kya kare, age hi kuch aisa hein :-)
@scrawler: how could you differentiate crush and love? crush happens to be the initial phase of love. crush helps the guy and the girl to know each other, to love each other. love is incomplete without the sweet emotions of crush! So, it definitely is crush, maybe her hero could work on it to bloom love ;-)
@scrawler: i am no member of FOSLA! i wish atleast a single sided love happens :-)
@Scrawler: gripping till the very end!! left me waiting for more...Hero never came? how long did she wait? how long will she wait?
probably, u could connect the next wednesday 3WW words to bring back our Hero:)
If not us, at least let a poem get a happy ending:) :)
if everything ends happily..we won't get a chance to become philosophers :P
@all - thanks for such great laughs..Senorita, i remmeber that story abt a snail..in marathi textbook!! n what a link-up here:) :)
sawan, u sure must have been that hero once, u know the possible reasons for our 'Hero' here to not reach on time??? Like to share that some time? make us laugh:)
scattered thoughts n FOSLA..hmmmmm!!! i'm sure both the parties involved think each is in FOSLA :)
So true !! :)
He will come. But will she be able to hold on? In this era.... who is interested in waiting?
@ scrawler... this is a bit too late a reply...and since Sawan has vehemently denied being part of FOSLA...I guess we should not send her to FOSLA... else we could have sent her there and "waited" and hoped and prayed for love to bloom between the two !!!
@ Sawan - what say ?? ... :))
@ scattered thoughts...always at your service :))
when FOSLA possibility is ruled out then there is just one thing which comes up in my mind hum intezaar karenge tera qayamat tak. khuda kare ke qayamat ho aur tu aayee :)
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